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I have a friend. Her name is hong and her english name is rita. I have been seen her before I went to dongguan. Sometimes I miss her as she is my classmate. We had been going to school together for three years. Her home is nearby our high school. She has a brother. She loves swimming and she likes cooking, however, she dislikes studying. I often tell her that she should study hard and it's very important to her. But she didn't care at that time. She was seventeen when she left the high school.