作者词汇表达丰富度要继续提升,高级词汇使用过少;从句使用不足,建议增加长句和复杂句的使用;全文结构较为严谨。
I live in a quiet and old town,where there are no mountain and sea.Only has a group of kind people and a row of ancient walls.My hometown play an essential role in ancient times.When Beijing floods,in order to protect the big city will flood to here.Therefore,we can visit it"s symbols,old walls and old dams.