希望作者可以加强词汇表达多样性,尤其是学术词汇的积累;正确句子比例较高,适当增加复杂句的使用,文章会更出色;衔接成分太少,文章结构欠佳。
I have a friend. Her name is hong and her english name is rita. I had been meeting her before I went to dongguan. Sometimes I miss her as she is my classmate. We went to school together when we were child Her home is nearby our high school. She has a brother. She loves swimming and she likes cooking, however, she dislikes studying. I often tell her that she should study hard and it's very important to her. But she didn't care at that time. She was seventeen when she left the high school.