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文中词汇表达比较多样，能多用高级词汇就更好了；作者句法不错，但是文章整体句子稍微偏短；全文结构较为严谨，应适当增加文中衔接词的使用。
I live in a quiet and old town,where there is no mountains and sea.Only have a group of kind people and a row of ancient walls.My hometown plays an essential role in ancient times.When Beijing floods,in order to protect the big city will flood to here.Therefore,we can visit it"s symbols,old walls and old dams. Here you can visit being the only one of its type scenery.The walls are so high and thick,shoeing that the ancient Chinese craftsmanship of the construction process.When you visit the dam,you will be excited.Not only is the dam beautiful,but it also too long.Believe it or not,we can walk along it all day.There are so many different kinds of birds living in the shoreside.We can see birds flying in the sky,that should be a good time. It"s really a great honor to have this opportunity to reception you visit my hometown.You will enjoy yourself if you go to my hometown.You will can"t give up when we leave here.
