结构良好,但是语言不流畅;句式变化不明显,另外要多多加强从句在文中的比例;文中词汇表达较为丰富准确,但存在单词拼写错误。
Many years ago, my hometown is surrounded by thick forest . The revier is clean and clear, the fishes are sporting on the lake. The houses in my village were used to be simple and humble,and the street were narrow. People live in the peaceful place hard-working and make life. Year in and year out, everything is changing gradually. Along with high-rising building and large mansions continuously spring up. Nowdays, various transportations are running on the roading rapidly. Accompanying with the industrial development, our enviromental problems become more and more serious. The forest is dispearing as well as many animals . Pollution treatment is extremely urgent.