单词拼写做的很好,请注意积累词汇量;从句数量过少;过渡词和衔接词使用欠丰富,层次欠清晰。
I have a good friend. she is a beautiful girl. she has long black hair, big dark eyes and red lip. her . she is good at singing. She is a clever girl. She likes reading , playing video games and chess. she is also nice. she often helps us . our classmates like her very much.