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Dear Mary, Thanks for your invitation. I'd love to go to your birthday party, but I can't,because I'm too busy. I have too many things to do (next Sunday). I have to clean my room and wash my clothes. And I have to do my homework the whole morning. In the afternoon, I'm going to go shopping with my mother. In the evening, I have to help my mother do some housework at home. So, you see, I'm really busy. I'm so sorry. Maybe I can go to your party next time. Thanks for inviting. Happy birthday to you! I hope you have a good time! Yours