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My views on online shopping As we know,nowadays shopping onlin trends to be a fashion and becomes more and more pervasive,as to play an significant role in people's everyday life.And I have some views on online shopping. Every coin has two sides.Although shopping online is striking convenient, shopping online also has many looming problems.Firstly,Shopping online makes people stay at home instead of going to market,and people have little chances to interact with each other.If so,the capacity of people to communicate is affected greatly.Secondly,shopping online creates numerous troubles for these physical stores.many physical stores are closed down and the statistics of real economy have been dim and negative recently.Finally,many counterfeit products are sold online,and many of them have quality problems. To solve these problems,I would like to share my suggestions.I hold the views that the govenment should take some continuous actions instanly to reduce the counterfeit products selling online,such as commerce legislation and quality inspection.What's more,people should go to market to shop partly,not only stay at home just to shop online by computer.