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Generally speaking people believe the things that they see on themselves.But sometimes it's unwise to draw a immediate conclusion once you see something.We ought to do some researchs before we estimate the things so that we won't blame somebody who is innocent and make yourself be a fool. I want to take Zhugeliang who almostly helped Liubei built a country for example though it may not very suitable.Most of us know them through the book writen by Luoguanzhong which is almostly an adventure of Zhugeliang.And affected by it,most of us believe that Zhugeliang is a man who knows everything and can do something that is rediculous such as borrow east wind.But if we have read the history of that epoch we will know Zhugeliang is not as powerful as we thought. So it's unwise to draw a conclusion immediately as we see something.Especially the Internet is so developed nowadays that we can receive numberless messages everyday and we can hardly judge these messages are ture or not.
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