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I have a friend. Wang tao is a one of my friend. He is ahand some boy. He has biue hair, two big black eyes and a red mouth. her voice is better. He is good at singing.And he want to became Singer Hee is a smart boy. He likes reading books , playing computer games and chess. He is also nice. He often helps us . our classmates like his very much.