文中词汇表达比较多样,能多用学术词汇就更好了;句式变化不明显,另外要多多加强从句在文中的比例;不能熟练使用过渡词,文章结构欠佳。
Dear Sir or Madam, I am a sophomore from the Foreign Languages Department.I am writing the letter for the purpose of expressing my greatest concern about the library's service. It must be pointed out that the current situation is going from bad to worse.Therefore,it is imperative for us to take some drastic measures.In the first place,why do not arrange an inquiry desk at the hall?In the second place,the students should have access to the latest issues of foreign magazines.In the third place,you had better maintain strict order at the reading room. Thanks a lot for your due attention to this letter.I am looking forward to some new changes in our library. Yours sincerely Zhang Wei