2010-2012全国中考英语试题汇编试题(72)写作:阳光体育运动

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I will never ever fail to remember one of the most important person in my life, my sister, a brilliant student who will go to America for her further education .She is so outgoing and wise , always be kind to everyone. Study never appealed to me , but she aroused my interest ,for her told me that when you communicated with a foreigner in English, you would feel a huge sense of achievement. When I was in trouble, she would get round to helping me with the problems. My mark gradually gets better with the help of her. Obviously, she exerted a great influence on my study. Needless to say, she also does hard in her study. Playing with her is such an enjoyment. She is fancy swimming. As I ever thought that swimming is so dull, but she changed it into games. This sort of swimming gives us a relaxation. I was disappointed at the news of she would go to America. But now it dawned me that it’s a new beginning for her and my memory with her will never fade away.