字数:200满分:100分
采用了简单的衔接手法,行文流畅;文中应增加一些长难句的使用,会为文章添彩;作者词汇表达较丰富准确,不过高级词汇的积累还有很大的空间。
As we can see from this picture,two footballers were playing a game that one of them was preparing to kick the ball a goal.Suddenly,the kicker is imaging what the door is so small that he couldn't gave the goal,while the goalkeeper is thinking what the door is so big that he couldn't keep the goal. This picture,at first,conveys a situation that it is a heated football match.It also demonstrates a universal phenomenon that how do most people's mind when they are facing troubles.most of them also have exaggerated the trouble whatever faced. When it comes to talk about troubles,none of us would like them.But we shouldn't seen them by using magnifying glass.We must face them with right attitude.The biggest enemy is ourself.If all of us do this,we will success more easily.