文中词汇表达多样性不足,在学术词汇方面尤其要多积累;正确句子比例较高,适当增加复杂句的使用,文章会更出色;衔接成分太少,文章结构欠佳。
I heard that there is a new teacher in our school. Yesterday I met him. He is a tallest and handsome man who I have ever met. I asked him some questions,such as where he comes from, how old is he, does he have girlfriend etc. I know that he works hard. I know that he has even been to America and Canada. In addition, He comes from my hometown Anhui. I feel very well. We were taught at school that water consists to hydrogen and oxygen. He is our history teacher.