熟练使用了一些长难句;文章结构不错,使用了丰富的衔接词和过渡词;作者词汇使用较为丰富熟练,单词拼写方面要更仔细。
I like to help people,If I am a volunteer,I would like to contribute my spare time to do the significative things,I will organize a team to help pupils accross the road at the gate of school during traffic at 7:00-9:00 a.m and at 16:00-18:00 p.m,maybe it will reduce traffic accident to protect pupils safety.I will organize a team to set up study club special for pupils,because I found a lot of training course too expensice to suit most of familly, I hope I can recognize some of professional young people .they will be able to service people when we are organize an activities. in the fact, I saw some of people didnot pay attention environment pollution,most of people is busy for work every day because of life pressure ,they didnot pay attantion to health because they are busy to work. I think if they can make their step slowly,and they should try to stop and go around to see,maybe they can feel different things to make their life relax.
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