很好的运用了从句,但部分句子稍有瑕疵;文章结构不错,使用了丰富的衔接词和过渡词;作者能较灵活地使用词汇,高级词汇使用较恰当,但存在一些拼写错误。
I like to help people,If I am a volunteer,I would like to contribute my spare time to do the useful things,I will organize a team to help pupils cross the road at the school gate during traffic at 7:00-9:00 a.m and at 16:00-18:00 p.m,maybe it will reduce traffic accident to protect pupils safety.I will organize a team to set up a club special for pupils study,because I found a lot of training course too expensive to suit most of familly, I hope I can recognize some of professional young people .they will be able to service people when we are organize an activities. in fact, I saw some of people didnot pay attention environment pollution,most of people is busy with work every day because of life pressure ,they didnot pay attantion to health because they are busy with work. I think if they can make their step slowly,and they should try to stop and go around to see,maybe they can feel different things to make their life relax.
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