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At present, computer play an important role in our life .There are many advantage for it nowsday. First,it can remeber more thing than human and have large place.Second,it is very small and no heavy.But in many year ago,comptuer is very big and very heavy.It is only can do simply thing . Computer become more and more popular in our life.We use it do anything,see movie,play game,listen the miuse,sing the song and so on.