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my school I am very happy to be a student . My school is so beatiful that I do not want to go home . Our school has three buildings which is teaching building . And has a small building which is our canteen . Not only we have many beautiful buildings but also we have a lot of green plants . For example,apple trees and mango trees and so on. Our teacher all are very friendly and nice . Although sometimes they are very serious for us when they are teaching.