拼写很棒,可适当增加高级词汇的使用;文中衔接词丰富;若增加一些从句的使用,文章会更不错。
A beautiful city in China I believe the beautiful place that my hometown named Qing Dao will makes you happy.It may be briefly summed up as follow. To start with,there has many interesting things,such as beautiful coast and blue sky,most importantly,the fresh air if you breathe in that it can bring the feeling of relaxing.Besides,the local food is very delicious and I can give a dinner for you.I think we standing in the beach and the wind swaying our face randomly that it is very wonderful. To summed up,welcome to my hometown.