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Do you think that financial disparity affects friendship? If someone asks me this question, I will say yes. In my point of view, diffenent levels of economic situation will cause many obstacles for social intercourse especially in terms of personal feeling, communication and value, which manifests that financial disparity will unavoidably affect friendship. In the first place, people with financial disparity usually differ in their abilities. On the side of the richer one, he probably does well in his work with excellent capacities, skills and performance, while the poorer may be unlucky that he don't get a satisfying job, also can't earn so much money. In other words, the poorer don't have the abilities as good as the richer. Therefore, when they are communicating with each other, the richer will show confidence even superiority, which makes the poorer feels self-contemptuous and distressed. This does harm to the personal feeling of the poorer and finally affects their friendship if it lasts a long time. Secondly, financial disparity has negative influence on their communication. As I have mentioned above, it is disadvantageous for friends to get along with unpleasant personal feeling and no doubt that this kind of feeling does not benefit to their communication. Apart from this, people of financial diparity also differ in their range of social intercourse, which means that they contact with different social class. Perhaps the richer studies and works with more elites while the pooer always stays in his groups. This can makes them lack common topics. So financial disparity will cause communication barrier. Further more, as saying goings, "economic base determines the superstructure.". That is so say, financial disparity leads to different values which is of great importance to friendship. Financial disparity brings up totally different attitudes toward life. Generally the richer is positive and hardworking, but the poorer may choose to live in a comfortable way and unwilling to challenge difficulties. If they can't agree with each other, they will have nothing to say and even cause contradiction. It shows that friends of financial disparity wil go far gradually due to these different values. To conclude, financial disparity affects friendship to a large degree. Only if we work hard, trying to narrow the gap of both materials and spirit with our friends, can we maintain long-term friendship.