2012年12月英语六级作文真题(II):人与电脑

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Computer and Man As the computer coming into peoples" lives ,not only when people are working but also during people spare time ,computer is necessary. computer has changed the way we live,makes it more convienent and more effective.But at the same time ,the increasing use of computer makes people get sick more easily,and looking at the scrine of the computer does no good to our eyes.the long times useing of computer makes people nervous and unpatinent.So we must make sure that computer can be used to make our working and life more convienent ,but we also have to keep the time useing computer , so that we can have a good health and make a good use of it as well.