文中词汇表达稍欠丰富,但单词拼写做的很棒;从句数量过少;过渡词和衔接词使用欠丰富,层次欠清晰。
I have a good friend. she is a beautiful girl. she has long black hair, two big black eyes and a red mouth. she voice is better. she is good at singing. She have a clever girl. She likes reading books , playing computer games and chess. she is also nice. she often helps us . our classmates like her very much.