拼写很棒,可适当增加高级词汇的使用;文章衔接手法恰当;作者句法不错,但是文章整体句子稍微偏短。
Everyone has his interests,me too.The ideal job in my mind is to become a accountant which is my minor course.The reason why I want to be an accountant is that I am fond of economy.I don’t know why I like it,maybe it is connected with money.Although math is not my strong,I still sensitive to number.I insist that I have ability to do the job well.First,I enjoy it.Second,I have patience to sit down and keep calm to finish the work.It is perfect that you job is you hobby.I hope I can do it in the future.