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A Beautiful city in China Have you heard the city which called shandong Province in china？well,my hometown is the beautiful city which located in the easth of China.she has the most wanderful sea view and the famous moutain .now i will take you into the beautiful city ,fllow me . I was born in qingdao of shandong Province ,so the first station where i will take you to that if you come to my hometown is qingdao .Qingdao has the amazing sea view which is famous to China ,have you seen the sun rise from the horizon ,what a wonderful enjoy when the first sun light come out to the peaceful sea ,besides that the food is also enjoy that you cannot miss it .the second station is jinan that the most important city of shandong,people always come quancheng into mind when you say the city ,it is historical city .and i will take you to daminghu to visit the beautiful water.and the last station we will go to the tai moutain ,i am swear you will love it welcome to my city ,i cannot wait to show the beautiful of my city
