2012年6月英语四级作文真题:过度包装的现象

有效地使用了语句间的衔接成分；若增加一些从句的使用，文章会取得更好的成绩；词汇表达丰富度要注意，不过单词拼写错误较多。

In recent,the many products bring out the information while on Excessive Packaging.the reson apper to the information is the manufactorer wished myself products could attractd to currents thought on Excessive Packaging.however,they begun failed their suprised,when they open this Packaging of outside,then,they would could think the shore or sould out. As a current，although these manufactorers is no probrem while quanlity of products, but they made a image give to client what their packaging of products should have an expensive price and good quanties.In my opions,these manufactorers should focus to the good quantly and no expensive price,but only focus to On Excessive Pcakaging.