文中使用了简单的连接词和过渡词;文中从句数量稍显不足,注意个别有错误的句子;请作者加强词汇表达的灵活性,但文中有较多拼写错误。
Recently,the many products bring out the information while on Excessive Packaging.The reson,apper to the information that the manufactorer wished myself products could attracted to currents thought on Excessive Packaging.however,they were begun failed their suprised,when they open this Packaging of outside,then,they would could think the shore or sould out. As a customer,although these manufacturers are no probrem while quanlity of products, but they made a image give to client what their packaging of products should have an expensive price and good quanties.In my opinions,these manufactorers should focus to the good quantly and no expensive price,but only focus to On Excessive Pcakaging.