2012年6月英语四级作文真题:过度包装的现象

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Recently,the many products bring out the information while on Excessive Packaging.The reason of appear to the information that the manufacturer wished myself products attracted to customers thought on Excessive Packaging.however,they were begun failed their suprised,when they open this Packaging of outside,then,they would could think the shore or sould out. As a customer，although these manufacturers are no probrem while quanlity of products, but they made a image give to client what their packaging of products should have an expensive price and good quanties.In my opinions,these manufactorers should focus to the good quantly and no expensive price,but only focus to On Excessive Pcakaging.