可适当增加从句的使用;语句间的衔接不是很自然;作者能较熟练、灵活地使用词汇,建议要多使用高级词汇。
Recently,the many products bring out the information while on Excessive Packaging.The reason of appeared to information that the manufacturer wished myself products attracted to customers thought on Excessive Packaging.However,they begun fading to their surprise,when they open this Packaging of outside,then,they could talk about with the shop or sound out alone. As a customer,I think that these manufacturers are no problems while quanlity of products,but they made an image give to the customer what their packaging of products should have an expensive price and good qualities.In my opinions,these manufacturers should focus to the good qualitly and no expensive price,but only focus to On Excessive Pcakaging.