可适当增加从句的使用;建议作者增加过程性词汇的使用;文中词汇表达较丰富恰当,高级词汇使用稍显不足。
Recently,the many products bring out the information while on Excessive Packaging.The reason of appeared to information that the manufacturer wished myself products attracted to customers thought on Excessive Packaging.However,they begin fading to their surprise,when they open this Packaging of outside,then,they could talk about with the shop or sound out alone. As a customer,I think that these manufacturers have no problems while quanlity of products,but they give to the customer made an imagenation what their packaging of products should have an expensive price and good qualities.In my opinions,these manufacturers should focus to the good quality and no expensive price,but only focus to On Excessive Pcakaging.