2012年6月英语四级作文真题:过度包装的现象

可适当增加从句的使用；文中词汇表达多样性不足，在高级词汇方面尤其要多积累；建议作者增加过程性词汇的使用。

Recently,the many products bring out the information while on Excessive Packaging.The reason of appeared to information that the manufacturer wished myself products attracted to customers thought on Excessive Packaging.However,they begin fading to their surprise,when they open this Packaging of outside,then,they could talk about with the shop or sound out alone. As a customer,I think that these manufacturers have no problems while quanlity of products,but they give to the customer an imagination while their packaging of products should have an expensive price and good qualities.In my opinions,these manufacturers should focus to the good quality and no expensive price,but only focus to On Excessive Pcakaging.