采用了恰当的衔接手法,层次清晰;能够很好的使用长难句且句法很棒;拼写很棒,可适当增加高级词汇的使用。
I know my foreign friend is going to visit my hometown.For this,I suggest my foreign friend to go to the capital of China, Beijing,which is an ancient city in China.As we all the Chinese known,Beijing is great of culture as an old city and the cultures are very colorful.In addition,there are a lot of historical buildings where when you standing there,you would seem like at Chinese traditional landscape paintings.Besides,with the development of China's economy,Beijing has become a large and international city,which has been held lot of world events.Such as the 2008 Olympic game,the Paralympic Game,the WPE and so on.In a word,Beijing,a word full of vigor and vitality,a window through which you can get a big picture of China,is definitely a place worth visiting.