作者词汇表达较丰富准确,不过高级词汇的积累还有很大的空间;句式变化不明显,另外要多多加强从句在文中的比例;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词。
In the near recently,more and more young students go abroad to finish their undergraduate major. They write letters to the professors about famous schools in America,England,Canada or Australia. If they write only one letter to one professor or only one university.If the professor denied the attendance,the student will be fall to push himself to be a high-rencle student.If he attendence a lot of professor and a lot of university.He will have more opportunity to the collage.For example,a smart people may want to stanford university or Californiya Collage of technology.If he don't have enough GPA or GRE score,he may be could attend Canigy Meloog University.