文章结构不错,使用了丰富的衔接词和过渡词;作者能较灵活地使用高级词汇,要仔细避免拼写错误;句式变化较为明显,可适当增加从句的使用。
We all know that "every coin have two sides", therefore, a booming and profitable business as tourism is, it undoubtful have some handcaps, which, in some tend, might threathe our living environment.but comparied with industries producing thousand tons of gas or gut, the influence tourism brought seems slight even zero. . Consequently I think that government should make a leap of tourism. Here are my personal views.first, it's increasing essential for a nation to develop economy strength,which is regarded as foundation of a nation and a key of competition between integrative national strength.so we are supposed to promote tourism with its huge profits.second, only if we have adequate nconomic power, we can shouder the responsibility of dealing with pollution and then pursuing a better life.last but not least, tourism's development contribute to pushing ahead of national culture, which is a characteristic symbol weighted national cultural soft power. In conclusion, we need to boost tourism.