使用了部分简单的长难句,可适当增加一些复杂的长句;行文稍欠流畅,应适当增加连接词的使用;作者词汇表达不够丰富,另外要仔细检查词汇的拼写。
Dear Mary, I am Ming-Li,Because I will leave office to Bijing for business about one week,The day after tommorw is the New Year's Day,So I could not discuss the New Year's Day part of our company with college. So it's the time for you to disscuss the thing with our colleges to hold a party.It is up to you to arrange the party's time and adress, If you decide on these, Then tell me the party's time and adress and something necessary to prepaer for me. Ming-Li