文中衔接词和过渡词使用的很棒;有效的运用了一些复杂句;文中词汇表达丰富度要加强,同时要注意单词拼写。
Welcome to China, I am glad you spend times in visiting my hometown, here i will introduce those brilliant places for you. as a saying goes, chendu is a city that visitors unwilling to leave ,which is right. First, there is not doubt that chendu has plenty of dilicious food as well as famous place.And then, the weather in chendu is comfortable.