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Welcome to China, I am glad you spend times in visiting my hometown, here i will introduce those brilliant places for you. as a saying goes, chendu is a city that visitors unwilling to leave ,which is right. First, there is not doubt that chendu has plenty of dilicious food as well as famous place.And then, the weather in chendu is comfortable. Next,living in chendu makes you feel great.