正确句子比例很高,但需多多加强从句的使用;作者词汇量偏少,但单词拼写做的不错;层次欠清晰,衔接成分很少。
To:John@163.com From:Tomsmith@hotmail.com Dear John Driscoll, I'm Tom Smith,the general manager of Sales Department about Fox Electronic Comply.I want talking you about the new produce on June 20th.The talking still is the launch date of the new product and the canteen about it.I hope we can establish business relationship with each other. Best wishes to you. Tom Smith