可适当增加从句的使用;行文稍显不流畅,应增加文中衔接词的使用;文中词汇表达较为丰富准确,但存在单词拼写错误。
I'm glad to hear that you will visit my hometown,I want to take you go to culture square.In China,there's a saying that "The landscape of Guilin tops that of any other place under heaven." In light of this,I will recommend Guilin as the first destination of my foreign friend's trip to China. At the culture square,on the on hand,you can learn much knowledge about our history,on the other other hand,with time goes,we alaway surf the Internet leading to do little exerses,so we can do more excers.Then we can take photos togther in orde to let us remind of the happy life. In my opinions,culture square is the best one where you can visit, I look forward to treating you.