文中词汇表达不够丰富,要多积累学术词汇;简单句型过多,从句使用不熟练;衔接词汇很少,建议加强过渡词和连接词的积累;连词使用偏少。
I think young people in China today are more self-centered than previous generations. Young people's life is better than previous generations.Many parents love their children.Many parents do not let their children do housework.So young people in China do not know the life is hard. It cause the young people selfish and lazy and self-centered. So parents should chang the way they teach their children with.