采用了适当的衔接手法,层次清晰;文中词汇表达较丰富恰当,但高级词汇稍显不足;作者句法知识很棒,适当增加从句的使用,会取得更不错的成绩。
How to make our life more meaningful in so limit time is a big problem to everyone. The views are different from person to person. So, what I want to do are three things. First, I will always persist in working hard and learning hard to shape a whole-life studying attitude.Because knowledge is power,which can continually improve our ability and further strength our mind.Such as saying going,"no pain, no gain." Second,I will never give up helping others. Because I can get a lot of precious friendship and learn a lot of things during the process of helping others. Besides, when someday I need help,I need not worry about that. Finally,also the most important to me is doing whatever I want to. Human's life just be once.You should always do something you like to make you happy and to make your life more meaningful. In a word, don't wast your time, and just do something that you think is right and meaningful.