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In the past, My hometown was very beautiful ,it was surrounded by the tree, the river is very clean and there are a lot of fishes in the river; There are many simple house in the narrow street; The life from people's labour is very poor. Now, there are many tall building and factory in my hometown; there are a ot of cars that run in the street; The delveloop of the industry makes the environment worst; The trees are reduced and the fishes are disappear. The pllution is very serious, so we need to control the pollution immediately.