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The Fina World Championships has just closed in Barcelona,Spain. Chinese team got 14 goldens on this competation.Sun Yang,the famous swimmer,had getten “the best male athlete”he’s the first chines who get this prize.Sun Yang is really one of the best swimmers in the world.because he’s very hard-working.Most of Chinese was pride on him because he swim got many goldens for Chinese team. On this competation, someone regreted on losing the golden. Ye Shiwen,swim very well on 2012Olimpic games,and broke many World record.On this competation,however,is only the seventh.She was very upset because she regressed.Maybe she took a lot of rests during the time that after 2012 Olimpic Game So,in my opining,hard-working is the important way to success
