加强一些长句和复杂句的使用;请作者增加词汇表达的丰富度,对拼写检查也要重视;文中基本没有过渡词和衔接词,建议增加衔接词汇的积累。
I have a good friends. she is a beautiful girl.she has black hair,two black eyes and a red month.her voice is better,she is good at singing. She is a clover girl.she likes reading and playing computer games and chess. She is alse nice.She often helps us.Our classmates like her very much.