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My View on University Ranking Nowadays,the phenomenon,more and more universities are crazed in university ranking,rises wide concern among people.And people hold different views of this phenomenon.Some agree while the others disagree. Admittedly,university ranking propels the development of universities in all kinds of aspects,including studying atmosphere,campus environment and so on.However,the increasing heat competition among universities cause bad impact that students will be divided into several levels making the education become more unbalance.According to the point of College Entrance Examination,students will go to different universities where have their own university ranking.Thus,the top students accept a better education while the other students can’t enter to their ideal school.What’ more,when two person compete in a job,the firm is more likely to choose the person who graduates from a famous university.But the fact is the person’s ability in all kinds of aspects surpass the famous university graduate.Because of the university ranking,the inferior university graduate can’t have an equal opportunity. To sum up,this phenomenon has both advantages and disadvantages.In my opinion,I agree with the view that its disadvantages far outweigh its disadvantages for students should accept an equal education and obtain equal occupational contest.
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