文中词汇表达稍欠丰富,但单词拼写做的很棒;可适当增加连接词和衔接词的使用;多多注意文中错误的句子。
i have a good friend ,she is beautiful girl. she has long black hair.two big blue eyes and a red mouth .her voice is better. she is good at singing she is a clever girl. she likes reading books , playing computer game and chess .she is also nice she often helps us .our classmates like her very much