结构良好,但是语言不流畅;文中用词稍显贫乏,另外请注意单词拼写的检查;从句数量不足。
Our house is a warm world. All family are live in it. our's living room is large. it has a big sofa,a carpet,and a big TV on the wall. there are some flowers nearly the window.Our bathroom is small but our kitchen is big. there is a refrigerator in the kitchen. in the summer there are usually some nice ice creans in it. this is my parents'room,they are talking happily. they often do this, my room and my brother are nearly. we are playing together.