作者词汇量比较丰富,一些高级词汇的使用也比较灵活,但要避免出现拼写错误;多多加强从句和复杂句的使用;过渡词和衔接词使用不恰当,缺少组织,可适当增加连接词的使用。
today,I am glad to paticipate this election for the president of university's union.I have prepared for long time. In the aspect of capacity.i have experice as a class leader in middle school and senior school.in that period, i get good reputation by classmate and teacher. and in the aspect of character.i thought i am a gentle person.everything and everybody will be considered in my plan.furthermore,i also can make a decision when there are many complex problem.ultimately,in the aspect of hobby,i like to read news per day.it can help me learn the worldwide information and expend my view.and i also favor to read magazine.for instance,the econimist. If i get the position.i wiil do something to change the campus environment.for example,planting more tree to keeping environment cleaning.