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Last month, I went to Xiamen with my daughter who was nine-year-old. I lived in a family hotel. It was close to the sea with traffic convenience, but I didn't enjoy it. The room was booked by me was better than we lived actually. Two young girls, one young boy and an old woman managed the hotel, they did never clean the room during we lived there. The old woman listened to the radio with a terrible old set everyday, one young girl was sitting behind the count with her head down. They were not sad, but they never smiled. Our room was untidy more and more, I coundn't bear that, so I had to sweep it myself. On the final day we live there, my daughter wetted the bed, i asked the waiters for a suit of fresh bedding, the old woman not only refused me but also got angry, she looked at my daughter rudely and complained loudly. This is a beautiful city, I like it, but I don't want to be there more.