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A Beautify city in China In China,where has many beautiful cities,they are scattere different areas.In China,as a saying goes‘he who has never been to the Great Wall is not a true man.' Recently,with the development of economical,many areas are developed,and travel is developed.It attracts many travelers,and recent economic. However,in my heart,my hometown is the most beautiful city.Even if it is not many famous view.My hometown is Sihong,it lies on ancient Xuzhong.Where has a lot water,it is intitued the home of carbe.Meanwhile,where has one of the most fresh water lakes--Hongze lake.Many people invist there,and stay their cheer and laughter everywhere. In my opinon,Sihong is a beautiful city,even if it has not famous view.In there,I live tevlve years,where beacomes a part of my life.