文章衔接手法恰当;文中从句数量过少;作者词汇使用较为丰富熟练,单词拼写方面要更仔细。
A Beautify city in China In China,where has many beautiful cities,they are scattere different areas.In China,as a saying goes‘he who has never been to the Great Wall is not a true man.' Recently,with the development of economical,many areas are developed,and travel is developed.It attracts many travelers,and recent economic. However,in my heart,my hometown is the most beautiful city.Even if it is not many famous feature spot.My hometown is Sihong,it lies on ancient Xuzhong.Where has a lot water,it is intitued the home of crab.Meanwhile,where has one of the most fresh water lakes--Hongze lake.Many people invist there,and stay their cheer and laughter everywhere. In my opinon,Sihong is a beautiful city,even if it has no famous view.There,I live tevlve years,where becomes a part of my life.